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madasario's avatar

Great post! I want to bring your attention to this part: "Not everyone is deep enough, not everyone is sufficiently broad minded." I'd love to see you rewrite that without using the "is" - meaning, can you describe what you mean when you say someone "isn't" deep or broad-minded enough?

My prediction, in rot13 so you can do the exercise before seeing it:

Lbh'yy qrfpevor fbzrguvat oebnqyl pbzcngvoyr jvgu gur vqrn gung crbcyr ner cyragl qrrc - qrrcre guna lbh, rira! - ohg gurl whfg qba'g pner nobhg jung lbh pner nobhg fb gurl fxvz gur fhesnpr bs gung gbcvp. Lbh jba'g svaq gung fhecevfvat - guvf vf jung lbh *zrnag* ol gubfr jbeqf! (V guvax lbh zrnag zber guna lbh guvax lbh zrnag - jbeqf ner vafvqvbhf.) Ohg V jbaqre vs lbh jbhyq svaq vg fhecevfvat gung znal zber crbcyr jvyy gnxr gur gvzr gb qevyy qbja vagb lbhe gbcvpf jvgu lbh vs lbh qba'g pnyy gurz funyybj naq aneebj-zvaqrq, ertneqyrff bs ubj lbh pnirng naq nffher gurz vg'f bx.

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Mark Neyer's avatar

Thank you! I love the suggestion and have already re written it. I’ll go back and check the rot13 message :)

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madasario's avatar

Awesome! My prediction was wrong, by like 180 degrees. But that's what learning looks like. :)

Thanks for humoring me.

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